The Light It was a late afternoon. Our class was sitting on a log and eating perfectly warm marshmallows while near the fire. It was a beautiful day and everyone had fun playing outside with each other. There were lots of things we could do.We went for hikes and we even got lucky to find a beautiful pool of water.
We were also lucky that we brang our swimming togs just in case we ran into a pool of water just like this one.I got up and ran to the top of the hill near by. I glared at the beautiful sun set as the wind slowly brushed across my face. It was so peaceful and Georges .
I turned around and started to head back to camp.Time had past and it was dark. The wind got colder and colder that it blew out our camp fire. I was scared but I could not let the others know that I was afraid of the dark.
I was so cold that I was shaking. We were all cold so our teacher decided it was time for bed. We all went into our nice and cosy tents. immediately all the other students fell asleep.Then suddenly I saw a bright light coming from outside I quickly got up and ran outside to check it out.There were fireflies. They were so pretty I had wished I was one. I could light up the night like fireflies. I guess when things are bad the light will come.
We were also lucky that we brang our swimming togs just in case we ran into a pool of water just like this one.I got up and ran to the top of the hill near by. I glared at the beautiful sun set as the wind slowly brushed across my face. It was so peaceful and Georges .
I turned around and started to head back to camp.Time had past and it was dark. The wind got colder and colder that it blew out our camp fire. I was scared but I could not let the others know that I was afraid of the dark.
I was so cold that I was shaking. We were all cold so our teacher decided it was time for bed. We all went into our nice and cosy tents. immediately all the other students fell asleep.Then suddenly I saw a bright light coming from outside I quickly got up and ran outside to check it out.There were fireflies. They were so pretty I had wished I was one. I could light up the night like fireflies. I guess when things are bad the light will come.
Today my L.I is to write a narrative paragraphs using topic sentence, Details concluding sentence. Today our group had to finish our writing work from last term week 9. But today I had made a different story because my other one was to long. ENJOY!
Hi Nyjah
ReplyDeleteI love your Narrative but you have to edit your Writing by puting in Paragraphs. (Keep up the Great Learning)
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ReplyDeleteHi Nazanin. Thank you so much for telling me what my mistake was. I have fixed the problem and my narrative is now in good shape because of you. Thanks for the nice comment too.
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